Crashing My Brothers Bike.
Crashing my brothers bike. One Saturday morning my family and I got the my brothers bike out and We played on it. The colour of the bike was blue and black. Dad started it up vvm vmvmvm dad revved the handle.
Dad said “jump on I said yup”.And the bike zoomed off as fast as a rocket ship. Then I turned and I done a skid and mud flicked in the air. Then I went straight Crash! into my dad. Three seconds later dad got up. He was going to boot my bottom.I would of got the enormous boot So I ran ahahahah Sonny laughed. Later on
Sonny said you are never going on the bike again. He let my Sister have a ride.She didn’t crash it. That was the most terrifying day of my life. And i'm never riding his bike again.
Well done Sweyde. You worked hard to add detail that describes what happened. I loved the part you used onomatopoeia and dialogue to add interest to this story. Another goal of yours could be to use speech marks for direct speech.
ReplyDeleteWell done Sweyde. You worked hard to add detail that describes what happened. I loved the part you used onomatopoeia and dialogue to add interest to this story. Another goal of yours could be to use speech marks for direct speech.
ReplyDeleteWell done Sweyde. You.You worked your best to add detail that describes what happened. I love the part when you crashed into your dad and got kike up the bum. Blog you latter.
ReplyDeleteI like the way how u are hooking your reader
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ReplyDeleteWow Sweyde such a fantastic story that you have I liked the part when you crashed the bike and why I liked it because it was a interesting part of your story.
ReplyDeleteHi Sweyde I really like your story about crashing your brothers motor bike the best part I liked about it is that when you went on your brothers bike and drove it into your dad your story was really really funny. Well done. Blog you later.
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